Hi Class! Please retell the events of your weekend. Write to the best of you ability – some suggestions:
- descriptive words (adjectives and adverbs)
- sentence variety (different patterns)
- complex sentences (conjunctions connecting dependent and independent clauses)
- idea development (logical sequence)
- conclusion
Hopefully you were able to enjoy the wonderful sunshine.
Well I went for dinner at a friends house and we played Just Dance#1 and #2 on the Wii. And on Sunday we went out for dinner at my grandparents house and my aunt came out for dinner too, we had ice cream after dinner. So that was my somewhat fun weekend.
Why was it only ‘somewhat’ fun? Remember to use an apostrophe to show possession: a friend’s house.
Friday I cleaned the house and the yard. Saturday I was finishing cleaning the house and after that I my mom made me go outside. She locked me outside and I climbed through my bedroom window. Yesterday I went swimming at my friends house and after that we sat on their trampoline and almost got a sunburn . After that I went to my other friends house and his parents were playing badminton to see who would have to pick up the dog poop. Then we went to his moms baseball game and his mom was playing against Myranda’s mom.
Good description. Remember to use an apostrophe to show possession: my friend’s house, his mom’s game.
Well my weekend was very exhausting. Well my sister had a soccer tournament on the weekend. My sister had a game 11:00 and then another one at 4:00. So we my dad made us French toast in the morning then we went to Madison’s game. It didn’t feel like a long time but it was really hot. so that game finished and we decided to go to my grandma’s pool for a while. We had a lot of time until her next game. We got in the pool and swam around the bottom of the pool. Then suntanned for a little. After that we had to leave and go to my sisters next game. We dropped my sister off with my dad at the game and me and my mom went shopping for a present. It was Ashley’s birthday party. So we got what we needed and then went to stop for a slushy on the way to the game. We got to the game. Madison was really tired so she wasn’t trying her hardest. We thought she might have got sun stroke. So the game finished and we had to go back home so I could get ready for Ashley’s party because we had to dress up. I got to Ashley’s party and met her other friends. HAPPY B-DAY! I went home and felt kind of sick but I was ok. The next morning we had to get up early because my sisters next game was at 9:00. We had a lot to do today. So we got up and went to her game. Our grandparents came to watch. It was so HOT! I think I got a sun burn. My sisters team lost but she was the only one to SCORE a goal. We were happy for her. When we got in the car she said she was so hot and felt like fainting. poor thing. She was so red. We went to the grocery store for dinner and desert. We were getting ready for our grandma’s birthday party at her house. We made lemon cupcakes. It was home made. YUM! We got home to make them and then my mom dropped me off at my grandparents house so I could go swimming. My mom went to the next soccer game and then came to my grandma’s house. We went swimming, suntanning, eating and just had a good time. We had to go home after hours and hours of fun and go to sleep because it was a school night. That was my fun and long weekend!
Great details! Remember to use an apostrophe to show possession: My grandparent’s house; My sister’s next game. You did remember to do this for Ashley’s party.
I had a great weekend. On Friday I had a soccer practise and that was very tiering because it was so hot outside, But it was very fun. On Saturday I hung out with a friend and we soaked my step-brother and his friend with water guns. Then on Saturday night I went to my birthday party at Boston Pizza, That was so fun. I went back home and my dad was very happy because the Canucks had won the game. My friend came over for a sleepover on Saturday night. Sunday morning I had to go to Kelowna for two soccer games. My friend and I had three water bottles each because it was so hot outside. Our first game was at 12:45 but we had to be there a half an hour early to warm up, So we got there at 12:15 and started doing drills. We went on to the field and played a Penticton team and won 5-0. The next game was at 3:15 but we had to be there at 2:45. WE were supposed to play a different Penticton team but we ended up playing the same team we played in the morning and we won 5-0 again. So after we drove home and I was so tired and hot. But otherwise I had a awsome weekend.
Sounds like fun! So does Boston Pizza actually have the Boston covered up right now? Quick fixes: if something makes you tired use ‘tiring’; use ‘an’ before words starting with vowels: ‘an awesome weekend’.
I hope the Boston part is covered up. π
i had a stupid weekend thats all π
Please elaborate what made it stupid. This is a writing activity and you are expected to contribute work at a level appropriate for a student near the end of grade seven.
Well On Friday I went to the bike ranch and rode until like five o’clock and went home to have dinner. After dinner I went over to Derek’s and we hung out until like nine then I went home.The next morning I went to soccer and played until 12:00. I went home after soccer and I hung out with Jacob, Derek and Skyler until 9:00 pm and Derek and Jacob slept over at my house. The next morning I got up and hung out with Derek all morning. After lunch we went downtown on our bikes and came back around 3:00 ish and helped Skyler unload stuff from his new house. After that me and Derek went home a had dinner. I went over to Derek’s with Skyler and hung out until 7:45 when I went home.
Friday my friend came over to hangout and we ended up having a sleepover. After school when he came over we went down to see my other friend just down the street. Then a couple minutes after we went down their a big group of our friends came along and we went with them for about 30 min. So after we went back to my house I brought 3 friends over then we started watching Family Guy. Then went on the computer and went on facebook and youtube. That night at about 10 pm we went outside walking around playing nicky nicky nine door for about 40 min. After we wnet back to my house and watched tv and went on the computer on youtube watching FAIL videos it was so funny LOL. I stayed up till 1 am and went to bed because I had hockey the next day and my other friends stayed up till 5 am. So later that day at about 11 am we ate breakfast and went outside running around,playing hockey and jumping on the trampoline for about 2 hours then went on the computer and watching tv. I went home at about 1:30 to get ready for hockey and drove their I got dressed and but I couldn’t find my jersey so I had to borrow somebody else’s. We did some drills and came off the ice and I went home and I was going to go to pool but they had a swimming competition/tournament so I just went home watched tv ate dinner and went outside and took some shots outside and at about 10 pm I went to bed and got up at 7:30 and got ready for hockey and my friend came and picked me up at 8:30 and we drove to kelowna. When we got their we had pre game warm up and we went on the ice and we won the first game 2-0 and after I went to eat and came back to the rink for the second game but we lost 6-4 and after I went to my aunts and uncles to eat dinner aet was so good π then we had desert and we drove back to kamloops at we got in at 11:20. When we got home I got ready for bed and straight to sleep and that’s what I did for the weekend. π π π π π
You certainly were able to do lots this weekend! Check out this link and practice the homophone their/there/they’re
In addition, when showing possession, use an apostrophe – “My aunt’s and uncle’s…”
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This weekend I went to Abotsford to see my auntie Nonie and uncle Bryans house on Friday after school.On Saturday we went to White Rock,and went swimming,made sand castles and looked in tidal pools.In one tidal pool I found lots of baby crabs and sea shells
clams and some mini tadpoles. After all that we got some ice cream then went back to my aunties house.The next day we drove home for 3 hours.Then we went shopping in Costco and went to Starbucks to meet my auntie scarlet.Then we went home and had dinner and then I read and went to bed.! that was my fun weekend !!! π π π π π
Thanks for sharing, it sounds like you had a great time. Be sure to add a space after punctuation symbols. You connected your sentences nicely using ‘The next day…’; try to avoid sentences starting with Then…Then…Then.
Keagan,his dad,and his dad’s friends, I went to the shillet (Shall ai) which is a cabin on a mountain we travelled on ski doos as well as i got the chance to ride one we had snow ball fights,made a crazy carpet track ,went to the frozen water and made a fishing hole even thought their was no fish, I learned how to play checkers so we played checkers and played game boy games when we gred. And while Keagan was still ski dooing I felt stupid so I decided to put my hand in the ice cold water all the way to my bicep I did that for 5 seconds then ran all the way up the hill except couldn’t because I was so dang tired got up went in the house rocked back and forward wrapping my arm in a blanket be extremely goofy because my arm felt weird the went back out side to the water pointed at the water and scowled in goofiness stuck my finger in the water ran up the hill half way spotted Keagan and greeted him and A lot more after lunch and all the way home I did entertaining things.
Sounds like an interesting and busy weekend. Watch for run on sentences. You have great details, but they are piled into a mess.
I sort of forgot NOOOOOO!!!
Take time to proofread. If you need to catch your breath when reading a sentence, chances are you have a run on sentence.
thats nice π
Remember the apostrophe: that is nice = that’s nice
i worked
What kind of work were you doing?
working for my b day party
Please write at an end of grade seven level.
I was working for my BIRTHDAY- DAY PARTY OK : HAPPY
Read some of the other threads to see what is expected. You are a capable writer. Stop this unexpected behaviour.
this weekend was great. First I opened my pool and started swimming then I downloaded games onto my R4 chip. After I went swimming again then I had lunch and went back to swimming. I had supper and it was too dark to swim so I went on the computer I forgot that I was going to sleep outside so I quickly got my sleeping bag and a pillow and got set up then I went to sleep. The next day I woke up and had breakfast. then when on the computer until I could go swimming.I had lunch and went swimming after I played video games until dinner then I went to one of my parents friend’s house then went home and went to sleep. I got up this morning had breakfast went to school and wrote this paragraph.!.
You certainly had a great weekend for swimming! Nice writing. Remember to proofread for easy fixes: capital letter to start a sentence.
my weekend was dumb
My weekend was spectacular. On Sunday my mom and I went to get are hair done at chatters in the mall and nails done to at FX hair and spa. After that we went to go shopping. we went home after we were done shopping and took my dog out for a walk, we came back into the house and I got ready for Ashley’s birthday party at 5:30 to 7:30. I got ready and I asked my mom if I could bring my dog for a little truck ride and she said “yes” so I went inside to get the dog and brought him into the truck. we went off to Ashley’s birthday party. I got to Ashley’s birthday party and she introduced me to some of her soccer friends. after the birthday party was over mt mom came and picked me up we headed off home to watch the last period of the game the last period of the game was a ty so they went into overtime, in the 11 seconds of overtime Vancouver had got the puck into the goal and they have won 3 of the4 or 7 games. on Sunday I woke up at 6:00 to take my dog out for a walk. I came back into the house and my dad said to me ” I half to go get some milk for breakfast” so he went down to the gas station and grabbed some milk. he came back and we had some breakfast. my mom finally woke up. that day we had to pull weeds and cut the grass because it was getting to long. I got some sun tan lotion on my skin and got a hat on and went outside and started to pull some weeds I was half way done and my dad asked if I can help him cut some trees down so we cut some of the trees down and put them into this huge gigantic wheel barrow that is on wheels that can hook onto the lawn mower. I took it down to a spot that the trees and branches can go onto the ground. after that I cut the lawn. my sister had this funny looking sprinkler on in the back yard so i went in to the house and had some lunch and got my bathing suit on and went outside and laid on the grass. we came back into he house and we looked at the clock it was about 3:30 so we staid inside and played with the dog my mom was cleaning the house and she said to me “would you like to watch a movie” and well I had to say “YES” so we watched a movie the movie finally finished and it was supper time so my mom invited my grandma over for supper.
Great details! Quick Fixes: our hair; I have to go get…
All I did this weekend was play video games=Super Mario Brothers,wash moms car ,went to base ball with mom and dad and drew a pictures of super hero’s,watched TV,read a book=My sister the vampire two..sign in to face book and watch TV shows on the computer …and that pretty much sums up my weekend.
You have many things to write about, now put your ideas into sentences.
GO CANUCKS GO !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! GO CANUCKS GO
On my weekend I went to the movie theatre with my friend and her dad to watch:X-Men:First Class and had to go to sleep at 12:00am because I had a early baseball game and I had to wake up at 7:00am. In the morning I woke up but I was still really tired, I got ready and did my hair for baseball then drove to where we had to meet my coach Vina. When we got there I forgot my glove but Vina said she had a spare one for me. We got in the truck on our way to Vernon for our baseball tournament and I fell asleep almost half way there. When we got to Vernon we had a trailer so we went to a campsite. At the campsite there was a pool that was not very deep and not big but it was fun. Right when we got to the campsite me and Caylee got changed into our baseball uniforms and they had long black pants. The first game we played was awesome and very fun. I was the last to bat because I was very very tired. Alexis is the best hitter on the team and the best pitcher on the team but she needs to get control on the ball because her pitches are really fast but she needs control over them. And Lindsey is one of the best hitter on the team. On the field I was right field for the first game and none of them came to right field on the game. The second game we played at was at Alexis Park and Alexis said that the park was named after her as a joke because her name is Alexis. We were playing against the Kobeau Koyotes and their pitcher was going really really fast and when Kiara (We call her Kiwi for short) went up she got a strike out and came off crying a bit because it was scary. When I went on I got a strike out too,mostly everyone did, because I was to scared to go into the batters box fully.On the field I played Centre field this time and one girl got it into the field but it was on right field and Lauren didn’t get it and she got to second base. After the game we finished we had lunch and went to subway and I ordered a foot long sub with iced tea and regular chips. It was really good! Then we went to the game and we were the first to bat.Their pitcher was really fast too but not as fast as the other one. When I batted I got to walk because she was throwing bad pitches. I walked to first then when the ball left her hand I stole second and then my friend batted it and I got to third. But when I had to run to home plate I forgot to slide and I got out.On the field I got to play third base and I had to get a bunt that was coming and got 1 out when she was running to third base.When we did 2 innings we were done and went to the campsite and got our stuff on to go swimming because it was so hot! Everyone couldn’t wait to go swimming.I was the first to jump in and Kiwi was the second then Lea was third, Alexis fourth and finally Caylee was last. In the cold and awesome pool we played volleyball,marco polo,pass then we played piggy in the middle. It was lots of fun! But then after like, 5 hours,ha ha, we got out and it was freezing cold but it felt nice and then got changed for bed and had dinner which was yummy and delicious because we had KFC chicken,chips, and smokies it was so good! After dinner me,Lea,Alexis,Kiwi and Caylee went to the swings across the campsite and Kiwi and Caylee ran through the swings without getting hit.Then ew left and a couple minutes later me and Alexis went back to the swings and played tag on them and I was it the most. When we went back we went to bed and watched a movie called:Bench Warmers which was really funny but we didn’t watch it all because we had to go to bed for a game in the morning. When we woke up, everyone got dressed for baseball and I played centre field and I almost caught a ball but it hit my arm and i threw to second base before she could run to it. They won and we didn’t get to play another game but when we went home I went swimming at Brock pool with Lea,Kiwi,Alexis and Caylee for 3 hours then my mom picked me up and we went to Riverside Park and It was really fun and I put my sister Keira in the water which was falling like a shower and then when we went down to the lake the water was so high!I was like “omg!” I My sister Kaia was the first to jump in then Keira then Me but Caylee didn’t dunk in.We went home had dinner and I went to bed because I was really really tired from all that swimming,playing and laughing! π π It was an AWESOME weekend!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! π π π π
Wow – great description! Playing ball in black pants must be extremely warm.
After school on Friday I went for asleep over at my friends place her name is Alexis. We had pizza for dinner from Vancouver Pizza ( Boston Pizza) and I ended up dropping my delicious pizza on the floor. Then we went outside and played soccer then after that Kiwi came over to and she was running on the grass and slipped into the sprinkler. Kiwi was soaking wet. Then we went to bed but we didn’t fall asleep right away we had walkie talkies in each room and we were up talking to each other. Then we fell asleep. We had to wake up at like 5 in the morning cause we had to be in Vernon before 10 for a baseball tournament. Allie and Caylee slept in the travel trailer with us. Then after all the baseball games were done we went back to the campsite and went swimming in the pool. We were swimming until dinner and then we ate we had KFC chicken and smokies it was very yummy. Then we went and played on the swings there it was fun. We had to go to bed after that but we were aloud to watch a movie, we watch The Benchwarmers. We had to wake up really early on Sunday because we had a game at 8 in the morning everyone was tired. We lost that game too. Then after that we headed back to Kamloops. After we were back in Kamloops Alexis, Allie, Caylee, Kiwi, and me all went to the Brock pool. Then everyone left and Alexis and I went to the Parkcrest Neighborhood store and got large slushies. Then I went home and my dad took the hole family to 7-11 for extra large slupies yummy. Then we had to go to bed.
Sounds like a fun and busy weekend! Quick fix: My whole (entire) family.
all i did was work. happy now Mr bell
Please go into details: what kind of work, who you worked with, how the job went, other things you did…
Again, this is a writing activity. One line of a few words is insufficient. Your job is to write, no need to concern yourself with my happiness.
On Friday I was going to go swimming with my friends, but there was some type of swimming competition on or something like that. So me and my friend went to the movies instead, but we had to watch Kung Fu Panda 2 because they wouldn’t let us in to Hangover part 2. After Kung Fu Panda I went back to his house for a sleepover and stayed up till about 12 because we had hockey the next day. At hockey we did some momentum drills because we haven’t been on the ice for like two weeks. After hockey I went back home and had a barbecue with my family and two friends for my brothers birthday. After the barbecue I played cod for 30 minutes then went to bed because we had hockey in Kelowna. We won are first game 2-0, but lost are second one 6-4. Then I went home ate dinner and went straight to bed which was at like 8 because I was extremely tired. Now I am at school.
Nice description – remember to use an apostrophe to show possession “my brother’s birthday”